Thanks for coming back for another Sunday! I have eight sentences for you from my post-apocalyptic renaissance, Cargon. Now we know the reason for the title, the game! There are many authors with fantastic snippets for you at Weekend Writing Warriors so be sure to visit them all.
As she did every time she entered the dining hall, she stopped to regard the Cargon board. It’s three-tiered surfaces and thirteen pieces made up the game elite used to rank themselves, to prove their fitness for their roles. Her keen interest in the game, and proven understanding of its rules, had directly led to her assignment in the classes of the elite.
On Eve’s first night in the dining hall, the High One had ordered her to never touch the pieces. She would never forget that night. At the time, she couldn’t have imagined being noticed by someone so important, but the High One had spied her, gauged her interest, and tested her knowledge.
Every few weeks, one of the elite would challenge another at the end of dinner. It seemed tonight would not be one of those.
She seems anxious to play herself. Maybe that time will come. Nice snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteIndeed. I hope my foreshadowing wasn't too heavy handed.
DeleteWell written. You tell a good story.
ReplyDeleteThank you!
DeleteInteresting the way the game is being woven into the story - nice touch. Enjoyed the excerpt!
ReplyDeleteIt's integral and a number of games will make/break the story.
DeleteThis is an interesting insight into the social order here.
ReplyDeleteThank you! I wanted a caste society, and hope I've succeeded.
DeleteOooo. I can't wait to see how the game is played.
ReplyDeleteI had to edit this story down, so I hope I kept enough of the 'playing' for people to get a good taste for it. You'll have to let me know!
DeleteInteresting... wonder how this will play out! :D
ReplyDeleteIt will Play, for certain. lol
DeleteA fascinating snippet. It's interesting about the game, and how it's used to rank people.
ReplyDeleteI figured, a post-apocalyptic society would elevate the inventive and cunning. A simple test for that? A game.
DeleteI enjoy and admire books centered around a game. My favorite is Jack Vance's "Trullion: Alastor" while perhaps the worst example is quidditch in Harry Potter. Quidditch is dumb game, with rules that make no sense.
ReplyDeleteI haven't read Vance's but I'll add it to my TBR list. I figured Quidditch was built like cricket, with lots of convoluted rules. :p
DeleteHmmm, I'm thinking the board won't go unused for long. Very cool premise.
ReplyDeleteIndeed! Thank you.
DeleteNow we wonder what the rules are.
ReplyDeleteThe first is, don't touch the pieces. But as you've probably guessed, she breaks that one.
DeleteWell, you hooked me already! Love the premise! If someone told me not to touch/play with the pieces, I don't think I could resist!
ReplyDeleteI know, right?!
DeleteI'm thinking she'll have her chance to play. :) I'm intrigued about the game and how it ranks people.
ReplyDeleteI'm interested to find out more about the game and how it tests people. I have a feeling she's going to be better at it than she should be, given her low rank.
ReplyDeleteThe description of the three-tiered board made me think of the chess Spock and Kirk used to play on Star Trek. Intriguing game. I bet Eve will play eventually.
ReplyDeleteThis creates some interesting possibilities for the future!
ReplyDeleteFascinating insights into the societal order. Can't wait to see Eve play the game.
ReplyDeleteNever touch the pieces, huh? Just another way to separate the classes, sounds like. I sense rule-breaking coming!
ReplyDeleteDon't touch the pieces? Well, if that isn't a red rag to a bull...
ReplyDeleteYou can watch but not touch. I wonder what role she's being groomed for.
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