Crunch
I whirl to meet my opponent, blade raised.
The brainless meat sack is fast and ugly as sin, slathered in crap and dirt, but he’ll be much prettier without that head. His black-red blood stains the snow, not mine, and I turn for his friend, adding another kill to my tally. Heph will be pissed when I pass him again.
Heph saved me, literally. I was a crying, scared, running wreck when he took me under his wing, taught me to fight, to shoot, to hot wire a car, break into a building. His total kills topped mine for a long time, but I’ve learned and I’m faster than he is. My score grew with experience, slowly matching and overtaking his death toll. I was in the lead when we left Freetown, but he got to count all the bodies he mowed down in the truck, hardly fair. This mob should be enough to push me over again.
I'm imagining a scoreboard like at a sporting match, showing his and hers kills.
ReplyDeleteLucky for her she met Heph but obviously she had the skills! Interesting excerpt...
ReplyDeleteTheir tally reminds me a bit of 10k from Z Nation. A great snippet! :)
ReplyDeleteClassy has such a great, distinctive voice. She seems pretty scary!
ReplyDeleteInteresting snippet. Looks like Heph was someone important in her life.
ReplyDeleteI sincerely hope that Heph doesn't become 'prey'? Where is he?
ReplyDeleteA battle to the end. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteUh, way to look at the bright side while fighting zombies. I really enjoy her voice.
ReplyDeleteSlasher up! Fun way to perform a difficult task.
ReplyDeleteNice little rivalry going.
ReplyDeleteA rivalry, and zombie slashing at the same time. A very nice excerpt.
ReplyDeleteI love the description - really I'm sitting here chuckling - the brainless meat sack...would look better without head. Fantastic. Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteWell, competing over kills is probably dangerous. Hopefully it doesn't end up with Cassy dead!
ReplyDeleteSounds like she's got a crap ton of skills! I suspect she'll regain the lead shortly. But I hope wanting to be in the lead doesn't make her careless. Great snippet!
ReplyDeleteFantastic writing!
ReplyDeleteGreat scene. Scary tough POV but perfect for the situation.
ReplyDeleteNothing like keeping score as she's running for her life. lol Scary scene!
ReplyDeleteLove the little touch of humor (not being fair that he counted the ones he hit with the truck) in a tough action scene.
ReplyDeleteOh, that opening description! What a visual...and I think I could sort of smell him too. ;-) Excellent snippet!
ReplyDeleteLove the zombie description. And the humour.
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