February 5, 2017

#WeWriWa Cargon: Honor and Privilege #fantasy #scifi #postapocalyptic

Hello readers and Warriors! I have another snippet from Cargon: Honor and Privilege and you can read all the other contributions at Weekend Writing Warriors. I also have a request. I'm looking for other blog hops to join in on, particularly those friendly to younger audiences. If you have any suggestions, please share! Now, returning to Eve...

“I do wish our stations were not so distant." He pulled his arms away and turned from her.
Eve fled to the library, her sanctuary. The rules of their society were clear. If she’d been interested and met him under cover of night, a relationship between one of the elite and a servant might be possible, but she’d never heard of one. She had never returned Louis’ affections and he dared to approach her while she was doing as instructed.
Storming up and down the aisles of books, she knew she had to get a hold on her temper. Her attitude was unbecoming, and although the librarians, as fellow servants, might not be offended, the elite accessing the library certainly would.

25 comments:

  1. Her indignation and frustration are very clear. A nice set up for the gamble she'll take!

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  2. Yes, clearly she needs to do better at hiding her emotions in front of the others but the library is a nice choice of a place for her to go. Great snippet!

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    1. Normally, she's very good at that, but Louis gets her goat every time.

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  3. What a situation! I wonder who will cross the lines of station first. Great snippet!

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    1. Indeed. I hope you'll enjoy the twist ahead.

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  4. Your story has relevance for every YA who's a victim of workplace sexual harassment.

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    1. Thank you. I hope they see that they have more options available to them than Eve does.

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  5. I enjoyed how your society's mores constrain her reactions. Good job.

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    1. Thank you. She is reaching her breaking point, though.

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  6. That guy sounds like a real jerk. Nice snippet.

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  7. There's always someone who manages to push just the right buttons to lose your cool. Looks like she's met hers. Love the setting of the Library too.

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  8. Love the set up of this story, and I'm with the others -- I like the library.

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  9. I'm glad he backed off- now she just needs to get her temper under control

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  10. Nice! I bet somebody's going to break some rules.

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  11. These rules don't seem to protect her as well as they ought to...

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  12. Hopefully she can calm down... ;)

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  13. A library is a good choice for a calming influence. I just hope it helps her before Louis comes back. Guys like him always come back, poor girl.

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  14. Pacing in the library...at least she's not talking, so don't suppose they can shush her. I am interested to know what will happen next.

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  15. I really like this story. Oh, the constraints on her, countered by the privilege of learning--that is certainly a double-edged sword. :-)

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  16. He assumes I'm sure that she wants a relationship? At the same time she's trying to keep her situation in the library and avoid his interest. Excellent snippet.

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  17. Thank you all for the comments. The library was always a soothing place for me. As for Louis, intervention is on its way.

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