January 29, 2017

#WeWriWa Cargon: Honor and Privilege #fantasy #scifi #postapocalyptic

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These are the next few lines from Cargon: Honor and Privilege. Prince Louis is  continuing to press his advantage on the servant, Eve.

He moved to place his hand on her again, and she leaned away to her left, twisting from him. Her skirts brushed his legs. Technically, she wasn’t allowed to touch him, and it was a loss of face for him to touch her. That didn’t stop him.
He continued to pursue her as she backed herself into the corner. He put his hands to either side of her head, trapping her effectively. Finally, unable to find another response, she turned her eyes level to his. In them, she held all of her hatred, her anger, his loss of honor. Would he continue to ignore the impropriety he was inflicting?

36 comments:

  1. Very intriguing. I's a loss of honor for him to touch her, but he so clearly wants to do so.

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  2. I agree with Cara. I'm curious as to why he's after her when it's a loss of honor for him. I just hope he's not planning to pull a "Carrie" on her. That would be so cruel. I'm so intrigued. :)

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    1. Nothing quite like that. He's just used to always getting what he wants.

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  3. I guess he doesn't care if there are no witnesses to see the honor lost. Interesting dynamics in the snippet!

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    1. Thanks, Veronica. It's true. He'll do what he can when no one is looking.

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  4. Intriguing! I love her fierceness and defiance. You go, girl!

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  5. I suppose a swift knee in the nuts is out of the question? Does that count as touching?

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  6. You've captured the times so well. I admire her feisty temperament. As for Botanist's comment, nicely put, my friend.

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  7. You've conveyed her desperate situation really well!

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  8. If looks could kill, eh? Very nice snippet.

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    1. Oh yes, mind you, she doesn't want to "kill" but the sentiment is there.

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  9. Great snippet. He has all the power, it would seem. But she also has the power to dishonour him. I wonder what will happen.

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  10. oooh - I can just see the look she gave him :-)
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    1. Thanks for sharing Daryl. Yeah, you can see the daggers shooting from them, can't you? :D

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  11. Yeow! How'd she get herself cornered? She needs to learn to be more strategic.

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    1. Sadly, she can't leave before the elite, so she doesn't really have a good way to avoid this. Luckily, she has at least one white knight coming to her defense soon!

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  12. If he keeps going, methinks there will be additional impropriety going on, and it will involve face-slapping. :-)

    Is this book available on Kindle, Kim? I couldn't find it on Amazon. :-)

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    1. I'm in the process of releasing a second edition, so sadly, it isn't right now. It will be! I'm hoping by summer.

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  13. I can just imagine the look she gave him. If she's going to survive, she'll have to make sure she's never cornered again.

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    1. Yeah, she's going to do her best. Unfortunately, this is not the last time Louis gets the better of her.

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  14. That's a good snippet. I can imagine the way she's looking at him.

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    1. Thank you. Yeah, she's definitely got laser eyes at that moment.

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  15. Some people don't care so much about a little loss of face, when they have a lot of power. I suspect he's one of those people. Jerk!

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  16. I'm curious to know why she's looking at him with hatred and why he's pursuing her even though he shouldn't.

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  17. He sounds like a man who doesn't consider anything he does wrong. And her feelings matter not at all.

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  18. The man doesn't take no for an answer. I hope she overcomes her reticence and smacks him!

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  19. I really can't see any way out of this for her that doesn't involve physically laying a hand on him. Hope help is coming.

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  20. I'm on her side, because he's getting a little too forward for my liking...

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  21. I think he seems quite capable of ignoring convention forever. How she responds will be the entertainment. Good snippet.

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