It's Sunday again, and I'm participating in another Weekend Writing Warriors blog hop! I want to apologize for some of my short replies last week. I was on my phone and unlike some, I'm not fast typing on it. Here is the next snippet from my post-apocalyptic renaissance. Eve is enjoying the class she has the privilege of attending. Well, she was enjoying it.
Her place was here, at the back, inconspicuous. She had done her duty if no one ever realized she was there.
She wasn’t that lucky.
“Server girl.”
Eve clenched her jaw and tried her best to prepare for what torment the Prince might have for her today.
Prince Louis put his nose to her hair. Inhaling deeply, he sighed. "Would you taste as wonderful as you smell, I wonder?" His hand traced down her side, just off her skin. It brushed the fabric of her skirt, and she stepped to the side.
He sidestepped with her, grinning now. "Skittish. I like that. Where will you jump to next?"
Very good snippet. She's in big trouble with the Prince. Does the escape come next?
ReplyDeleteThe Prince should be in as much trouble as her, but things never seem to work out that way, do they?
DeleteWell ok, so fr I'm not liking the prince! But maybe he'll be redeemable....interesting snippet.
ReplyDeleteYou shouldn't! Perfect. He doesn't get redeemed in this volume. But he makes a fantastic antagonist for pushing her into all the important decisions ahead.
DeleteHm, he strikes me as kinda creepy. Hope she can get away if she has to!
ReplyDeleteSadly, she's still pretty vulnerable at this point. A champion is coming for her!
DeleteI'm getting the creeper vibe too. Very good characterization! Looking forward to more! :)
ReplyDeleteThank you! I will be sharing again next week.
DeleteI identify with hiding at the back, although I've never had a prince nuzzle my hair ... thank goodness!
ReplyDeletehehe. It's a special school experience.
DeleteI don't like him. Privileged jerk. :-) I am definitely pulling for Eve, though.
ReplyDeleteEve is definitely one to root for.
DeleteCreepy guy. Nice job making him creepy without going over the top.
ReplyDeletePerfect. He is meant to be oppressive, not insurmountable.
DeleteLike the others, I'm not sure if I like the Prince. I'm curious to read more to see if he continues to torment her, or if he can change his ways.
ReplyDeleteHe definitely takes a new tact in the long wrong. Does it work for him? Well, we'll see!
DeleteI wonder if she'll be able to slip away from the prince, who seems like he likes the cat and mouse game way too much.
ReplyDeleteHe's definitely on the hunt.
DeleteBoy, does that send me back to high school. I don't miss the vulnerability of being a teenage girl.
ReplyDeleteNo kidding, right?
DeleteWhat a jerk. Reminds me of middle school. I want her to put him in his place.
ReplyDeleteIt takes a little while, but she does!
DeleteYup, total jerk. Too bad she can't punch him. Maybe later? (readers can always hope)
ReplyDeleteLOL no, she's not one for violence. She's more the "out-smart them" type.
DeleteThe prince is awful. Like Alexis I think it's a shame she can't punch him.
ReplyDeletePunching isn't her way. She still manages to hit him where it hurts.
DeleteThat's a deeply creepy entitled, and unfortunately powerful man. She needs to figure out how to get away from him!
ReplyDeleteHe is very powerful compared to her, but not to others in the elite. She'll find her champion soon.
DeleteMy first visit to your blog. Great snippet. Lots of conflict in the future. Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much for stopping by!
DeleteWow, how mean is that prince? I feel for her, but I like that she's sticking it out for a good education.
ReplyDeleteShe would give up a lot for that.
DeleteI hope she can avoid Prince Creepy, but he seems determined to play with her for now. Would love to see her take him down. :)
ReplyDeleteDeleted the duplicate. He proves to be more determined than anyone would expect.
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ReplyDeleteNot a fan of the creepy prince. Hopefully she can stay out of his way!
ReplyDeleteMy first visit to your blog. Like the others I detect a whiff of arrogance about the prince. Will be interested to see where the story goes.
ReplyDeleteThe Prince is horrid! Nicely portrayed, Kimmy. I can't wait for karma to get him.
ReplyDeleteThe Prince is horrid! Nicely portrayed, Kimmy. I can't wait for karma to get him.
ReplyDelete(sorry about the Kimmy... Just saw the bottom of your site 🙈)
ReplyDelete(sorry about the Kimmy... Just saw the bottom of your site 🙈)
ReplyDeleteIf the Prince is the good guy, he has a LOT of work to do to win me over, never mind her.
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