January 22, 2017

#WeWriWa Cargon: Honor and Privilege #fantasy #scifi #postapocalyptic

It's Sunday again, and I'm participating in another Weekend Writing Warriors blog hop! I want to apologize for some of my short replies last week. I was on my phone and unlike some, I'm not fast typing on it. Here is the next snippet from my post-apocalyptic renaissance. Eve is enjoying the class she has the privilege of attending. Well, she was enjoying it.

Her place was here, at the back, inconspicuous. She had done her duty if no one ever realized she was there.
She wasn’t that lucky.
“Server girl.”
Eve clenched her jaw and tried her best to prepare for what torment the Prince might have for her today.
Prince Louis put his nose to her hair. Inhaling deeply, he sighed. "Would you taste as wonderful as you smell, I wonder?" His hand traced down her side, just off her skin. It brushed the fabric of her skirt, and she stepped to the side.
He sidestepped with her, grinning now. "Skittish. I like that. Where will you jump to next?"

42 comments:

  1. Very good snippet. She's in big trouble with the Prince. Does the escape come next?

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    1. The Prince should be in as much trouble as her, but things never seem to work out that way, do they?

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  2. Well ok, so fr I'm not liking the prince! But maybe he'll be redeemable....interesting snippet.

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    1. You shouldn't! Perfect. He doesn't get redeemed in this volume. But he makes a fantastic antagonist for pushing her into all the important decisions ahead.

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  3. Hm, he strikes me as kinda creepy. Hope she can get away if she has to!

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    1. Sadly, she's still pretty vulnerable at this point. A champion is coming for her!

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  4. I'm getting the creeper vibe too. Very good characterization! Looking forward to more! :)

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    1. Thank you! I will be sharing again next week.

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  5. I identify with hiding at the back, although I've never had a prince nuzzle my hair ... thank goodness!

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    1. hehe. It's a special school experience.

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  6. I don't like him. Privileged jerk. :-) I am definitely pulling for Eve, though.

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  7. Creepy guy. Nice job making him creepy without going over the top.

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    1. Perfect. He is meant to be oppressive, not insurmountable.

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  8. Like the others, I'm not sure if I like the Prince. I'm curious to read more to see if he continues to torment her, or if he can change his ways.

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    1. He definitely takes a new tact in the long wrong. Does it work for him? Well, we'll see!

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  9. I wonder if she'll be able to slip away from the prince, who seems like he likes the cat and mouse game way too much.

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  10. Boy, does that send me back to high school. I don't miss the vulnerability of being a teenage girl.

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  11. What a jerk. Reminds me of middle school. I want her to put him in his place.

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  12. Yup, total jerk. Too bad she can't punch him. Maybe later? (readers can always hope)

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    1. LOL no, she's not one for violence. She's more the "out-smart them" type.

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  13. The prince is awful. Like Alexis I think it's a shame she can't punch him.

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    1. Punching isn't her way. She still manages to hit him where it hurts.

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  14. That's a deeply creepy entitled, and unfortunately powerful man. She needs to figure out how to get away from him!

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    1. He is very powerful compared to her, but not to others in the elite. She'll find her champion soon.

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  15. My first visit to your blog. Great snippet. Lots of conflict in the future. Tweeted.

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  16. Wow, how mean is that prince? I feel for her, but I like that she's sticking it out for a good education.

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  17. I hope she can avoid Prince Creepy, but he seems determined to play with her for now. Would love to see her take him down. :)

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    1. Deleted the duplicate. He proves to be more determined than anyone would expect.

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  19. Not a fan of the creepy prince. Hopefully she can stay out of his way!

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  20. My first visit to your blog. Like the others I detect a whiff of arrogance about the prince. Will be interested to see where the story goes.

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  21. The Prince is horrid! Nicely portrayed, Kimmy. I can't wait for karma to get him.

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  22. The Prince is horrid! Nicely portrayed, Kimmy. I can't wait for karma to get him.

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  23. (sorry about the Kimmy... Just saw the bottom of your site 🙈)

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  24. (sorry about the Kimmy... Just saw the bottom of your site 🙈)

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  25. If the Prince is the good guy, he has a LOT of work to do to win me over, never mind her.

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