Hello fellow Weekend Writing Warriors. I'm new to your group and will kick things off with a few sentences from my debut novel, Cargon: Honor and Privilege. The second edition will be available in 2017 and I can't wait to share it.
This is from the opening chapter, opening scene. The setting is several centuries after the fall, in the midst of a second renaissance. Yes, a post-apocalyptic renaissance.
Standing at the back of the room, Eve was thrilled to be in the class even though her status prevented her from actively participating. The young adults in the seats were elite. Born to the wiliest, most intelligent people in Fontive. Eve, by contrast, was born to a cook and stableman. She served in the palace as her parents did, serving wine when the elite joined for dinner every evening. Attending this class was a gift beyond measure.
Although her intelligence matched or rivaled that of those seated, she wouldn’t be able to speak with them or sit among them. Her place was here, at the back, inconspicuous.
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Welcome to the hop! This sounds like a really fascinating premise for a story.
ReplyDeleteHappy to have you joining us! Post apocalyptic stories are always intriguing for sure...
ReplyDeleteInteresting that even in a renaissance, some damaging social attitudes get resurrected along with the learning :)
ReplyDeleteWelcome to the group! Interesting world you have there...
ReplyDeleteOutstanding opening to your apocalyptic beginning. You've captured this reader, new friend.
ReplyDeleteWelcome, Kimmdonn!
ReplyDeleteI (and many others) can identify with being excluded because of a working class background, and you want that ease of identifying.
Welcome, Kimberly. This is a very supportive group. Your snippet raised all kinds of questions. Good job.
ReplyDeleteI have a feeling her place is just about to change. Nice tease and welcome to WeWriWa!!
ReplyDeleteWelcome!
ReplyDeleteI know why elitist societies are so popular--people want to keep the power and influence to themselves, but it always seems self-sabotaging to make the bright 'lower' classes never contribute.
Welcome! An intriguing introduction to this story. So many possibilities. :)
ReplyDeleteGreat intro. I'm eager to know more about her and her world.
ReplyDeleteWelcome to the WeWriWa!
ReplyDeleteEnjoyed your snippet and can't wait to find out if Eve's inconspicuous position is about to change.
Welcome, Kimmy. Excellent start. I am looking forward to a lot more!
ReplyDeleteWelcome, Kimmy. Excellent start. I am looking forward to a lot more!
ReplyDeleteWelcome, and great set up!
ReplyDeleteI like the setting of your story--a second renaissance. Great beginning! I already am pulling for the main character, and dislike the elite (just a bit so far). I'm curious who gave her this gift.
ReplyDeleteWelcome to the warriors--we're so glad to have you here!
Welcome! I enjoyed the snippet- this is an interesting world you've painted in just a few lines.
ReplyDeleteWonderful beginning! Very intriguing!
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