Happy Sunday! I hope you'll join me and the other Weekend Writing Warriors in sharing 8-10 sentences from a piece. This is from the first chapter of the first book in the Cargon series. We get our first glimpse through the eyes of someone other than Eve, the shadowy figure.
The servant had just picked up one of the pieces and held it in her hand. His breath caught. Would she put it back? If she did, he would never mention this – except to her. She must know how dangerous it was for her play with those pieces; she would become the lowest of servants, or worse, exiled if she played and lost. Surely, someone had told her. She didn't put it back in the starting position, but made a legal move, demonstrating her knowledge of the game. Glancing his way, she paused before turning and walking away.
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Interesting another servant sees what she's up to, and seems to be on her side.
ReplyDeleteWe learn more about who he is in the next few sentences. ;)
DeleteIntriguing to learn more about this game from another POV. :)
ReplyDeleteVery interesting the way a servant observes every move.
ReplyDeleteI like having the other person's POV on this. Interesting snippet. Putting on my Admin hat, I didn't see the link back to the WeWriWa site? Can you please add one - thanks!
ReplyDeleteEep! Fixed! :D Thanks for the reminder.
DeleteIntriguing snippet. Love the casual look back at the end.
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I love that she knew what she was doing and made a 'legal' move. Really enjoying this story!
ReplyDeleteSo she has someone on her side, who won't tell on her, and who seems concerned for her. Great things revealed from this new POV!
ReplyDeleteIntriguing snippet. She made a legal move and wondering where this will go next.
ReplyDeleteAn intriguing story, and interesting to read from another POV.
ReplyDeletePretty strong penalties for picking up a piece. Very intriguing.
ReplyDeleteClearly the move she made will have vast consequences. Can't wait to see what they are.
ReplyDeleteSounds like there's a lot at stake!
ReplyDeleteShe must be familiar with the game. i wonder what she's hoping to gain?
ReplyDeleteWell, her watcher has good (if slightly condescending) intentions. Wonder if they'll speak to her, and what they'll say.
ReplyDeleteI sense trouble on the way! ;)
ReplyDeleteOoo, intriguing!
ReplyDeleteThat has to be Eve! Nice way to introduce her to the story. :-) She's no ordinary servant girl. But who is this voyeur??
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