I stand ready, my guard up. I know the attack could come from either side, but will most likely come from behind. They love biting into the back of a neck, breaking it if possible, that way the kill stays fresh while they feed. Disgusting creatures. I’m not about to have my blood taint the snow. However, I face the building, watching for my best friend and partner to emerge.
It’s not bright, exposing my neck, but without guns, luring them in close is the only sure way to kill them. They aren’t terribly cautious but can recognize a kid with a rifle or Glock; I have neither -- I did.
Why didn’t we bring more ammunition? I mean really, we knew what we were in for when we got outside the fence. Sometimes we really are just a bunch of stupid kids.
I love how everyone who writes about zombies makes them slightly different from others. Makes the story stand out more, I think. :)
ReplyDeleteLove that last paragraph - especially the first line. You have to know you're in trouble when you think - why didn't we bring more ammunition? Tweeted.
ReplyDeleteNice flow to the snippet and I felt the character's thoughts were well done and age appropriate. And of course I'm waiting for that inevitable attack, so really a great excerpt!
ReplyDeleteDidn't bring enough ammunition? That's like the horror movies where the person who's TSTL says, "What's behind this door?"
ReplyDeleteLove the voice, Kimberly. I have never read or watched Zombie stories. I look forward to being educated!
ReplyDeleteExciting snippet, and I enjoy her voice. I like how she points out they're just "stupid kids". Too often characters become instant super heroes.
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet, full of suspense and just the right amount of horror! :)
ReplyDeleteOutstanding, so different from the gentility of your other stories. I sense a "coolness " about him. So good for young folks.
ReplyDeleteGreat piece of self-reflection that reveals so much. Creepy cool!!
ReplyDeleteThis sounds like a scary situation!
ReplyDeleteWell written. I like how the character strategizes.
ReplyDeleteGiven his situation, his internal monologue is believable and appropriate -- and it's interesting that, despite the possibility of a bite on the back of the neck, he still shows so little fear.
ReplyDeleteSo he recognizes that he may have made a mistake. Nice detail about biting the neck.
ReplyDeleteA lot of ambush predators go for the neck. It's effective, for sure. Scary snippet--really raises the tension!
ReplyDeleteGreat snippet and a hooking final line!
ReplyDeleteLove the last line. Great snippet. Love how she schemes. Says a lot about the enemy and her group.
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Great inner thoughts to know the character.
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