July 30, 2017

#WeWriWa Never Say Die: A Zombie Time Loop Story #zombie #paranormal #apocalyptic #groundhogday

Welcome to the Weekend and the Warriors that Write! Yeah, that's WeWriWa. I have gotten so many great speculations about Cassy and her parents. I also see I've made a mistake and posted the last two snippets out of order. To review: Read this and then this or scroll past this week's snippet.

“Cassy, wait!” My mom chases after me, her brown curls bouncing more than mine - shorter, the way my hair used to be. “Talk to us. Tell us what happened.”
“You both died, okay? You were infected and turned into . . . them.” My voice cracks, and I stomp even harder. My stupid hair will not stay out of my mouth. “Bleh, and why give me back this?” I fight my hair into a knot.

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And as promised, the whole segment together.

“Mom?” I ask, choking on the word. “Dad?” I run to them and hug my mother tightly. Maybe I am in heaven.
“Cassy? What’s wrong, honey? Weren’t you having fun?” she asks, smoothing my hair.
“Fun?” I ask, incredulous. “Yeah, lots of fun. It’s great watching monsters tear apart everyone you love.” The tears that started at the sight of my parents multiply and roll down my cheeks. “Really riotous.”
“Cassy?” my father asks in a serious tone. His blue eyes are as solid as his voice. “Are you okay?”
“No, I’m not okay. I’m obviously dead.”
My parents look at each other and I can see the questions they’re asking without speaking. What has gotten into her?
“I’m not insane,” I argue, pulling away from them. “This place stinks.” I storm off wondering why, if this is heaven, they are acting so oddly?
“Cassy, wait!” My mom chases after me, her brown curls bouncing more than mine. They’re shorter, the way my hair used to be. “Talk to us. Tell us what happened.”
“You both died, okay? You were infected and turned into . . . them.” My voice cracks, and I stomp even harder. My stupid hair will not stay out of my mouth. “Bleh, and why give me back this?” I fight my hair into a knot.


16 comments:

  1. Must. Make. Time. To. Read. This. :-) Great snippet! Shows the time loop well--her confusion when she hasn't figured it out yet!

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  2. Whoa! What a snippet. Scary and it's almost confusing with the parents and daughter.

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  3. I wonder how long it takes her to figure out she's in a time loop.

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  4. Poor Cassy. She's got to be so confused.

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  5. Interesting snippet. I missed last week, so nice to read them both together. Looking forward to more.

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  6. Thanks for putting all the snippets together for us. It makes more sense in context and in order.

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  7. Such a fascinating story going on here! I could really visualize the characters from the snippet.

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  8. Her parents must really think she's nuts! You portray her frustration well.

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  9. I admit to a bit of confusion about which snippet to critique, but in the first one I found her reactions quite believable. Even the hair.

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  10. Somehow the hair really shows her confusion! Great snippet, really shows us how lost she is.

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  11. Wonderful how confused she is. I think I might be as well in that situation - lol.
    Tweeted.

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  12. The poor girl must be so confused. I love zombie fiction.

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  13. Some hair is more fractious than others! I like the small detail of her hair among all this emotional drama.

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  14. Stuck in a time loop with zombies, and oblivious parents? Man, she is having a bad day.

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  15. You betrayed her frustration well. Great snippet.

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